Thursday, June 26, 2008

To feel (verb. 2 a: to be conscious of an inward impression, state of mind, or physical condition) . . .

When there is a void,
we must fill it.

But sometimes the substance
that created the absence
isn't available
to refill, patch in, replace
what was removed.

We might have to use
a different material,
and depending upon
its constitution and
physical properties,
the filling might leave
many smaller holes
in addition to the unwanted
substitution.

Maybe it's better
(sometimes)
to keep the hole?

(This is not a poem. I just felt like using line breaks.)


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For some time, I have been intrigued by the notion of loss and gain. It seems that when we lose something, we also gain something, even if that gain is imperceptible at the moment. And when we gain something, we also lose. Perhaps I will go into more depth on this topic at a later date.

* * *

To fill
To feel

Pretty close sounding verbs.


* * *

I feel rather holey right now.

11 comments:

Betty Edit said...

1. It's not bad as a poem. I would just remove the word "many" from line 14.

2. Depending on where you're from, "feel" and "fill" may actually be pronounced exactly the same.

3. Holey Betty, Batman!

Olive Kite said...

1. Funny, but I don't like MANY either.

2. I think I pretty much pronounce them the same way, and when I try to distinguish FEEL from FILL, it just sounds like FEEEEEEEEEEEEEEL.

3. Holey, whole-E, holy . . .

Olive Kite said...

Perhaps this is slightly better:

To Feel

When there is a void,
we must fill it.

But sometimes the substance
that created the absence
isn't available
to refill, patch in, replace
what was removed.

We might have to use
a different material,
and depending upon
its constitution and
physical properties,
the filling might leave
smaller holes
in addition to the unwanted
substitution.

Perhaps it's better
(sometimes)
to keep the hole?

--I'm not sure I need physical properties . . . but I like how it sounds . . .

Betty Edit said...

I actually liked it better with "maybe".

Olive Kite said...

Wow, you are a careful reader. :-) Why doesn't that surprise me?

Sheila said...

It has an existential feel to it. Will others see this somewhere besides on your blog?

Olive Kite said...

Sheila,

Welcome! I'm so happy to reconnect with you.

To answer your question, pretty much everything on the blog is just on the blog.

-Olive

Betty Edit said...

Unless you, Sheila, take something off of this blog and publish it as your own. But that, my friend, is also called plagiarism.

Olive Kite said...

Sheila, meet Betty, a writer of novels and a good friend.

Betty, meet Sheila, an educator of educators and a good friend.

Sheila said...

I would never plagiarize from this blog.

Hi Betty. Nice to meet you in cyberspace.

Olive Kite said...

Yeah, if you chose a blog to plagiarize from, it would most definitely not be this one.

:-)